The Best Way to Start & End a College Essay! | Tips for Common App and Supplementals

Every year, two of the biggest issues I see in student essays are weak hooks and poor conclusions. What really breaks my heart is not just the fact that these two issues are so prevalent - more than half of the essays we read and edited had these problems - it’s also the fact that when the hook or conclusion is done poorly… it’s done really, really poorly. Like will-kill-your-chances-at-getting-admitted poorly. 

That’s the bad news. The good news is that bad hooks and bad endings are actually pretty easy to fix!

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0:00 Intro
1:00 Hooks
4:36 Conclusions

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About Kevin Zhen: Exeter '16, Yale '20 (East Asian Studies)
Since 2016, Kevin has personally helped more than 30+ students gain acceptances into every Ivy League University, as well as top tech schools such as Stanford and Georgia Tech. He also loves teaching creative nonfiction, flash fiction and poetry. In total, his students have won more than 75+ Scholastic Writing awards.

About Jeffrey Yu: Yale '23 (Computer Science and East Asian Studies)
Jeff is a senior at Yale double majoring in Computer Science and East Asian Studies with a concentration on China. His college admissions essay was featured in the New York Times, and he specializes in essay writing, college admissions strategy, and life coaching. He has served as a Student Ambassador to the Yale Admissions Office, written extensively about college admissions on Quora and has taught courses on motivation, passion, and leadership while sponsored by the US Embassy in Tokyo.

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