Horribly Bad Writing and the WORST Worldbuilding (Blood of Hercules Romantasy Reaction)

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Some books fail because of weak sentences. Blood of Hercules fails because its entire world collapses under the weight of its own contradictions.

In this first part of my three-part developmental edit, I break down why the worldbuilding in Blood of Hercules by Jasmine Mas doesn’t work and, more importantly, what writers can learn from it.

We’ll talk about why geography, time, logic, and causality are the cornerstones of any believable fantasy world. You’ll learn how to avoid “timeline soup,” how to balance mythology with history, and how to build rules that make your magic, your politics, and your characters feel alive.

Whether you’re a fantasy author, editor, or reader who loves a good deconstruction, this series is for you.

This isn’t a hate review, it’s an editorial autopsy. The goal is to show how bad writing can teach us to improve our craft.

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